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Nature's Tour

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Hidden behind the bush was a meadow,
Where trees and blossoms perform lovely songs,
A symphony piercing like an arrow,
Nature's tune where nothing's  right nor wrong.

Sway those green leaves and produce haunting notes,
Wriggle your bodies o' little creatures,
Clap those small hands for we are about to float,
State of nothingness, aesthetic pleasures.

Release your mind and let it fly somewhere,
Be lost in time and space and feel it all,
Let your spirit free, travel anywhere,
Feel and hear our hearts as they rise and fall.

Come and join this unforgettable tour,
Have it again and again, more and more.
NaPoWriMo April 30

This is my last entry for the 30 day challenge. WoW! Although, I missed two poems ('cause I started doing the challenge April 7).

COngratulations to myself..LOL..

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Well, it's been long since I passed to this group so here it goes. I want to know how else could I improve this poem? And I also want to know the pros and cons of this piece? I was trying to portray nature so was I able to do that? And, how about the words I chose? Was the rhyming forced? Thanks guys!
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I like the feminine half-rhyme sceme you've employed here; it reflects the dappled panoply of nature. Some of your lexis, as Jenu rightly says, could do with some revision though; particularly in the second stanza.